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    dots Submission Name: Remember Thisdots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 684
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       everyone this is something very personal.. i really could care less how it looks.. because it just needed to be said.. this goes to everyone that has made my life better.. those i have loved and call friend..

    i hope i never fail any of you..
    Adam


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    dotsRemember Thisdots
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    For those I care for, I would dedicate all
    Those that I call friend, I would lay down everything
    Everything I have ever known

    When words elude me the times I seem to need them the most
    Just look into my eyes
    They will tell you everything you want me to say
    Everything you need to hear

    I have hated, knowing that pain seems to rule this world
    Because I know that this could be the only place I see you all
    The only place I can be there for you

    If I could take all your pains, your sorrows, everything.... You know I would
    I would carry it all just to see any of you smile
    Just to know you can be happy..
    That would be enough for me

    If I could tell you all the answers and speak everything you should hear..
    I would.... I would do anything to see you stop hurting when your in pain.
    Just to know you are at peace
    If only for a little while

    When my words fall short, I beg for your forgivness
    I just hope you can give me that
    Because that is when I'm just afraid of what to say
    The times I am terrified I could hurt you more

    For those I care for and those
    The ones I call friend
    Know that you are never forgotten
    You are always held dear to me
    And I'll always be there for you no matter the cost

    I love you all
    More than you will ever know
    I hope you can see that
    Though I wonder if my words fall short again




    Submitted on 2004-11-20 22:17:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm...an endearing message here...i find myslef wishing for the same things at times...seeing one of my friends crying with pain and agony makes me wish i had the words to stop the pain, then hating myslef because i do not...i love this poem, and, like you said, the structure doesnt matter. Its all in the message, which is very strong in this piece...*sighs*...never mind...

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    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      Everyone who knows you knows that this is true. You dont need a poem to show it, it is just there. You know what you have done for me, and I know I cant thank you or repay it in any way. More then twice you saved me, nothing I can do can repay you. you defintaly arent like other guys, and I could tell that from the first time I met you. But this Poem speaks the real you.

    Kera
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem because its a differnt take then alot of poetry written now a days is first of ll its baout otehr people great and second its talking about postive things and caring about other peopl not actaully hating themi think its great i really like it
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by casey | [ Reply to This ]
      I've said it many times, you have a huge heart. This proves it. I really think you did an excellent job here. Yes, this is very personal to you and I think that's what makes it great. I hope you found peace in this.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! I really enjoyed this poem. I dont think your words fall short at all. It is nicely written, and the grammer is good. ALL in all I would say it is a beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by amboehm | [ Reply to This ]


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