Finaly I have found a poet whose style is akin mine, complexity in verse that no one will understand, though the poem is presented simply. I hope to read more of your stuff and I hope you will read mine, true friend. Your in pakistan i'm in australia but we are close. vvv.
The brevity and abstract beauty of this piece really drew me in. I reread a couple of times and have to say that i really respect and admire the carefully chosen and placed words and the beauty of the concept and images, but after reading it a few more times again, i'm still not totally sure what you are trying to say. An enjoyable read nonetheless, but i'm not certain why. Thanx for your words. =Jimma=
I got confused on who dwells in whose bosom! Very abstract and draws the reader in to analyse further, but didnt really work as it could have for me. Maybe some of the wording needs a rewrite...just my view...pm me for a rewrite if you choose to do it!
Beauty and abstractness distilled. Some punctuation and a look at some of the wording, I feel, would greatly enhance the flow and emphasise the beauty and eloquence of the person you are describing. Worth taking a look at!