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    dots Submission Name: Pepper in My Fooddots

    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       On stepmothers who tamper with food! An old poem...just posting for a poet who needs to know this pain can be overcome!

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    dotsPepper in My Fooddots

    All is quiet but for a blink
    When I hold my breath to help me shrink...

    Just two slices of buttered bread
    Just two...I acknowledge with dread
    Two slices...ten mouthfuls? Twelve?
    Into the pot of fire I'm forced to delve.

    One spoonful of sheer hell
    To two mouthfuls of bread
    Panic rises...

    My eyes stream
    My lips and face are red
    Panic rises...

    My nose runs
    And all the time I ram in the bread.
    And panic rises...

    The butters melts and cools.
    But I rationed like a fool
    and here again......
    Panic rises

    I have half a pot of fire and no bread.

    I'm breathing fire with each fresh breath.
    And fresh breath hurts.

    Now, I have half a pot of fire and no cooling butter.
    My mouth is roaring, "It's too hot" I want to mutter.

    "Come on" yells the Dragon,
    But it's I who snorts fire
    Through my mouth and my nose
    The tearing flames go.

    I go into my mind
    Switch off, eat fast
    It's like spoonful on spoonful of grated glass
    Razorblade goulash!
    It will take at least an hour for the throbbing pain to pass.

    It usually does.

    As I choke down the last of my *pot noodle
    I notice a dusting of powder on top
    I always thought it was out of the pot
    But now I am wiser and realise it's not.


    *Pot Noodle...a snack pot that you add water to.

    Submitted on 2004-11-21 03:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey! i'm late to read your stuff it is pretty cool fun at first mymouth waters with an animal apetite but keeps subsiding tillno more.these two quotes amuse me much. "Just two slices of buttered bread
    Just two...I acknowledge with dread
    Two slices...ten mouthfuls? Twelve?
    Into the pot of fire I'm forced to delve.
    "I have half a pot of fire and no bread.

    I'm breathing fire with each fresh breath.
    And fresh breath hurts.t"
    it is a poem well created to satisfy to kill (enormous)serious appetites i guess
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by kittycampbel | [ Reply to This ]
      I like "goulash of grated glass" now that's an image.
    This is very well written, the foul food has pepper in it.
    I understand but you insist on making me feel the heat of a dragon's mouth, seeing the dust on the top,
    knowing there's not enough butter on my bread. That's what a good write is all about. Thanks for sharing. nansofast
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      you have something for food don't you ? you're doing very well you'd be qualified to be our 1st cheff poet :) very well done keep on moving :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...odd. This was very, very odd infact. I'm not sure I understand it all that well, or at least respect what it's trying to say...yeah.
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Cutting Envy | [ Reply to This ]

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