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    dots Submission Name: Suicide girldots
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    Author: Cutting Envy
    ASL Info:    900/?/Mars
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 116/160/53
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsSuicide girldots
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    She creeps into my thoughts,
    On silver streaked moon lights.
    She wants the pain to swell
    On darkened lonely nights.

    These times I wished I knew,
    Just what had happened.
    Those days so long ago
    The years are lapping.

    She weeps and cries his name
    He never answers.
    She's drugged and full of shame,
    Still never answers

    The words of sorrow,
    That creep out of her mouth
    Fill with strange hatred
    The demons never lie

    A cry for help
    Silently screaming
    These words are usless.

    Show them in your actions




    Submitted on 2004-11-21 03:31:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Indeed - show them in your actions. Like poetry, understanding is best without any words at all - best with plenty of room for interpretation. then again, the best part about poetry is always finding what others thought..this would kinda deny her that ability. Then again, nobody has much interesting to say any more anyway eh?
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]


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