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    dots Submission Name: One Bite of The Cherrydots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Works on two levels for me...


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    dotsOne Bite of The Cherrydots
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    Fruit bursts.
    Eruptions of flavour,
    savoured in
    licking waves.
    Tingling in depths,
    Taste buds;
    With relish,
    Hunger growls.
    Scrumptious,
    Luscious,
    Delicious.
    A mouth is alive
    from one bite
    of the cherry.




    Submitted on 2004-11-21 03:37:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love the double meaning, love the way its written, it is simple, elegant and intelligent, suggestive without being vulgar - very nicely done, my favourite kind of piece, somewhat innocent and still sensual ^_^
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]
      well, on one level, it can be just about biting a cherry nad hungering for it and on the next level... well, just reading the first few lines, i had a lil bit of an idea as to what you're saying...
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by MzJae | [ Reply to This ]
      a very nice written light poem that brings a cheer to ones mind with its simplicity and clearness it makes one feel enjoyment while his eyes travel through it , well done :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      Do I sense some form of double entendre here? Maybe it's just my one track mind. A very well written and accurate description either way. Easy and fun to read. Thanx for your words.
    =Jimma=
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Jimma | [ Reply to This ]
      this is quite an odd poem yet easy to understand.because you have received so many comments on it already that seem to have covered all the bases,i will not say anymore.good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]


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