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    dots Submission Name: Help Themdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 598
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    dotsHelp Themdots
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    you thought it was a joke.
    you didn't think it was true.
    now you feel guilty, saying,
    "i didn't know what to do."
    well you could have helped me,
    you know you could have tried.
    and now that i'm gone,
    all you do is cry?
    why don't you go out,
    and find more out like me.
    go out and help them,
    set their minds free.
    take them away from sadness,
    keep them from the dark.
    do some thing nice, you know,
    like take them to the park.
    hold them tight with comfort,
    never let them get away.
    say to them, "i love you.
    "and we want you to stay."
    to me they never said this,
    they only expressed the hate.
    i tried to do my best,
    but couldn't escape my fate.




    Submitted on 2004-11-21 10:45:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanks for commenting on this one, i appretiate it. ill be keeping my eye open for your work too ok! we all try to be happy but it doesn't alway work, right.
    but we all still try!
    christina
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      love the flow of the poem, i liked it great job on it! its a lil sad, but thats ok! everyone needs a lil sadness in their life at sum point! great job on it!
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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