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    dots Submission Name: I cry no tearsdots
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    Author: Tinasha
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Oklahoma City
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 100/142/41
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1090
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this poem is retarded on purpose, the bolded words are the words that run into another sentence, enjoy!


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    dotsI cry no tearsdots
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    My eyes are crying,
    but no tears touch my cheeks.
    No one else feels what i feel
    is frustration. Overwhelmed with life,
    running out of time
    goes on without my permission…
    Wait! I scream. Rewind! I cry…
    but no tears touch my cheeks.
    No one else sees what I see
    is hypocrisy. Taken down by the weight of lies,
    eyes going blind
    are those around me.
    Focusing on the back of their eyelids so long…
    they don’t open
    wounds ache for healing…
    Pain! I scream. Rewind! I cry…
    but no tears touch my cheeks.
    No one else hears what I hear
    is sadness. Torn apart from past desires
    and wishes
    control my ill-driven life…
    what part of it I’ve lived
    too long to turn around and start over.
    Time wouldn’t allow it
    isn’t fair!
    Slow down! I scream. Rewind! I cry…
    but no tears touch my cheeks.
    But my eyes are crying…
    for time.




    Submitted on 2004-11-21 16:50:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      perfect! i love it.. your words...i dont know, just give me chills when i read this. its absolutely awesome- even though you make it seem as if no one could/can relate..im sure there are a lot of ppl out there that do.
    keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Aryeeka | [ Reply to This ]
      its nice, but how can you say no one feels what your feeling?! i really relate to this but hey i know the feeling of not knowing any one relates. i love it
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the way you bolded the words that attach themselves to the next line. very unique and creative idea! i liked this poem and could relate very much with what you are saying. many times i've wanted to stop and rewind. but we can't, can we? and the crying without tears touching your cheek... i have a song that has a line like that: I look in the mirror and see my eyes crying; the tears are invisible to everyone but me..." good job here!
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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