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    dots Submission Name: Can't Block The Screamsdots
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    Author: darkness child
    ASL Info:    21/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 195/266/48
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       My normal thoughts on the usual day.


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    dotsCan't Block The Screamsdots
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    Inside a small house,
    With no where to run,
    Trapped by circumstances,
    Hating my life.

    They scream back and forth,
    As I try to block it out,
    Dreaming of a happy family,
    Where parents don't hit each other.

    I can't not listen anymore,
    My headphones won't block the screaming,
    I try to ignore it, but it can't be ignored,
    And in those moments I think,
    "I would be better off alone."

    I wish I was dead.
    I wish I had a normal life.
    I wish my parents didn't drink.
    I wish I could be happy......




    Submitted on 2004-11-21 20:09:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sad thing is, most people live just like that although you probably don't think so! Very good poem. I always listen with my headphones on sooo loud when that [censored] happens everyday. just hang in there, and keep writing!
    -steph
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by HurtDeepDown | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interseting... I liked how it flowed... I personaly feel this isn't an everyday situation.. No offense. But the best verse of the one wit...I can't not listen anymore,
    My headphones won't block the screaming,
    I try to ignore it, but it can't be ignored,
    And in those moments I think,
    "I would be better off alone."

    I really liked it
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by Kueen_Emerald | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like what my life use to be like but it gets better. good write i do think it could of been more but thats just me keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]


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