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    dots Submission Name: The Little Glass Girldots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Little Glass Girldots
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    Tap Tap Tap...

    Is she made of glass sir?
    Why Can't we take her down?
    I'd really like to play with her...
    Why is her mouth always in a frown?

    Yes she's made of glass boy.
    Ain't she pretty as a pearl?
    Be careful when you touch her.
    Don't break the little glass girl.

    Why did she just fall down like that?
    I didn't even touch her face.
    It's like she just...jumped off the shelf.
    Jumped right out of her special place.

    Yes she jumped down from there boy.
    And do you want to know why?
    She was tired of being made of glass.
    The glass girl all her life.

    Couldn't be squeezed too tight you see,
    For fear that she might be broke.
    Couldn't be hugged a proper hug.
    For worry that she might be choked.

    Sitting up in her special place boy.
    People never stopped they always passed.
    Passed right by her sitting up there,
    Because she was made of glass.

    So she was better off being broken sir?
    Then not being able to be touched?
    Why couldn't she be allowed to feel something?
    Is that asking for too much...

    Now she is finally free you see boy,
    To be herself, to dance, to twirl.
    Nobody ever fell in love with glass boy,
    No-one loved the little glass girl.




    Submitted on 2004-11-22 05:56:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this is so beautiful.

    i really love the way its written and the meaning behind it. I agree with whoever said it was kind of like a fairytale. Thats exactly the right word. It seems, magical, in some way. I really loved this.

    take care

    love from Heather
    x
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by poketmouse | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this s diffrent! this as remarkable... i love the way you portray the fragility of the glass girl. i love the way you make it in a dialouge which make it very unusual and unique. i can really relate it to an emotion or something that in a way very fragile where in we are very hesitant to show and feel it coz we are afraid we might break it. very impressive piece.
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by eidnyc d_ noble | [ Reply to This ]
      You have received a lot of praise for thys one. And rightfully so- I love it- Here’s to favorites- wheeee~ Thys was so tight (non-slang) and uniform. It read perfect and was sooo sadd- lyke a Hans Christian Andersen fairy tale… Great work- I’ma fan…
    Peace, love and total supremacy
    ~#6-
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      A message I read behind this piece, of someone who has been protected from experiencing the joys in life, finally breaking away from her bonds.
    A very nice write. Thought provoking, and as you see, I read it my way
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my... this poem really tugged at my heartstrings. Every emotion is wonderfully portrayed in this poem - the sorrow, the joy, the irony... it is really heartfelt. It made me reflect: what would I feel if I were the little glass girl? Never to be loved, never to feel real joy? And in the end, only to be broken. To tell you the truth, I'm so taken in by this piece of poetry I don't think commenting about other aspects of the poem is necessary. I really thought the emotions were excellent enough to capture a reader's heart and soul. This poem is beautiful in a morbid way. But beautiful it is nonetheless.

    You are quite a poet... I mean, I see you posting quite a number of poems each day. You are truly gifted.
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by zhi wei | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is...I am in love with this poem. I really like the emotions, sadness, joy, and images captured in your words. As I read this I could see the little glass girl and a little boy. The boy kind of struck me more as one from a long while ago, a very poor boy. The guard as a tall and thin man, one who looks older and very clever. And, ah the little glass girl struck me as a beautiful girl with ringlets of glass and big eyes, widened with emotion. That is just how I saw the characters, and the scene played like an old movie in my mind. Gorgeous...

    'Is she made of glass sir?
    Why Can't we take her down?
    I'd really like to play with her...
    Why is her mouth always in a frown?'
    -Why does anybody wear their mouth always in a frown? Oh how badly I would like to answer the boy, how many questions he must have if he was the only one to take even a slight interest in the girl of glass. This is a really beautiful start and gives the reader some nice imagery.

    'Couldn't be squeezed too tight you see,
    For fear that she might be broke.
    Couldn't be hugged a proper hug.
    For worry that she might be choked.

    Sitting up in her special place boy.
    People never stopped they always passed.
    Passed right by her sitting up there,
    Because she was made of glass.'
    -These two stanzas make me think, make me ponder a lot about my own life. As if the glass girl were really me and I had lived my life on a glass shelf, only to be broken and shattered in the end. The end when I would be happy. Your poem and these beautiful stanzas kind of hit me emotionally, this is such a beautiful poem, words can not describe it. I am sorry I could not give you a better comment, but this is what I have come up with.
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn. I like this a lot, but it's so sad. You really make the reader feel for the galss girl. It's kind of disheartening though that she couldn't find love without jumping. I also think that you've captured a feeling/emotion/something that is widespread today. The feeling of being made of glass; that you (as a general word, not you specifically) might break if squeezed to hard, if somebody dares to love you. That's really sad. Anyway, this is really great; I love the imagery and the story. I hate the fact that she broke herself, but I'm glad she's finally free to love.
    J
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure exactly where you're going with this one. I know some people who are very 'precious' and whom you need to be careful around so as not to offend them. I feel that they definitely need to come down to earth. I also know that i myself have on occasion felt quite fragile, like if anyone came to close to me i would be likely to shatter. As i said, not too sure of which direction you're goin with this one, but either way i liked it. It was a very enjoyable and easy read. In these two lines:

    'So she was better of being broken sir?
    Then not being able to be touched?'

    Do you mean 'off' and 'than' (as opposed to 'of' and 'then').

    Anyway, i really liked this. Thanx for your words.

    =Jimma=
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Jimma | [ Reply to This ]


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