Jimma, m8. I owe you, so here is one already. On a negative note: This poem is VERY long and it is filled with such a lot of words that someone that does not have a theoratical musical background will not understand. You have to sit with a dictionary to understand this and some of the words are not in the dictionary.
What does cadenza and anthemic ( Is it relating to an anthem, perhaps) mean? Perhaps I would then understand what is being said.
On a positive note. I love this poem. I read it once and understood most nothing. Printed it out and checked out the words I did not understand. It all made such beauty.
1st stanza or even the title - describing your loves voice to a symphony or suggesting that it sounds harmonious in sound. Brilliant. So much said in two words. This whole 1st stanza to me is like coming home from a hectic day at work and being nurtured by your love. Giving you renewed hope just by talking to you. Hope this makes sense.
Second stanza is supportive of the first - after listening to her - you feel that you can yet again take on the world and nothing is impossible. Saying so much about your relationship.
3rd stanza - a bit confusing, since I don't know what cadenza means and there's not much else to which to compare it too, so that I can have an idea. The ivory and Ebony black contrast, works well here. I'm a bit confused here - are you the one singing in this stanza, or still her. Either way it works great. Her voice is so pleasant and gentle to your ear that you are weak in the knees. Or you go on your knees and ... You know what I mean, I hope.
"Concertos of accord" this is good. Something meant for a soloist and yet being able to agree in your opinions. This is a touch of brilliance. They way you use these to describe this agreement of different opinions. Perhaps agree to disagree, hehe!
"Existential stave" - I get two meanings here. That she's the one that determines what your life is gonna turn out like - happy. Or she's something that fills a whole within you and you're just so compatible, like a hand fits a glove.
"Epic aria" stanza - in silences so much more is said??
Cresendo of colour - beautiful, m8. Jimma, you really have a way of saying things. What I understand and grasp here is that happiness is just on the increase?Right??
"The percussive rhythm". Like not everyday with her is the same. Not the same routine, but there are always something new? That's what I get here.
Hope you get some sort of construction from this. You'd better reply to this. This has to be the longest comment I have written. Hope it's constructive though. Please answer some of the things I asked. I'll check out another soon. Cheers, m8. Kritzman
This is a beautiful piece, with just enough musical imagery to emphasise, and not enough to overwhelm or to become gaudy. It seems a little on the long side, but given the quality of the writing it is by no means a large issue... a lovely write and a pleasure to read.
Hey Jimma, My heart just got warmer and warmer as I read this until I reached the last line. I love people with all may heart, but music has always been my best friend. I speaks to us on many levels all of which seem to be listening in my case. Beautiful images! The muses have blessed you, this has the sound and feel of music herself. this is a terrific piece, congratulations. nansofast
Your use of metaphors is really good. I was going to comment on the abnormality of the stanzas, but on second reading see that they are your line breaks. Overall a very good job, albiet just a wee bit too long. Or perhaps overemphasizing the point. But still a very good write.