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    dots Submission Name: Five Hundred Stone Messiahsdots
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    Author: Jimma
    ASL Info:    22/m/Melb Aust
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 217/234/54
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Not sure exactly where this image came from, but it wouldn't leave my head until i wrote it down. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsFive Hundred Stone Messiahsdots
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    Here I am again
    Paralysed by mortal terror
    Shaking, shivering, breathless, quivering
    Where am I?
    What is this place?
    I look, with growing dread, around me
    And survey my grotesque surroundings
    I lie in the middle of a morbid crop
    Of stone-cold granite crosses
    Each one bearing the hanging form
    Of a deformed saviour
    Turning his bloodied face in my direction
    One thousand pierced hands
    Reaching out to me
    Five hundred stone Messiahs
    Writhing in the ecstasy of agony
    Each one dying for my sins
    Over and over again
    A sliver of a waning moon casts its filmy luminosity
    Over this eerie nightmare
    A living field of carved figures of the lord
    Row upon gruesome row of petrified crucifixions in action
    Five hundred tortured voices call to me
    From the depths of eternity
    A host, five hundred strong
    Wailing in an ancient tongue
    "Why hast thou forsaken me?"
    I must escape from this horrible forest of screaming statues
    Never to forget the sight, the sound of death in stone that night
    I run and run and run and runů
    Will I ever escape his echoes?




    Submitted on 2004-11-22 07:02:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this part the most
    "And survey my grotesque surroundings
    I lie in the middle of a morbid crop
    Of stone-cold granite crosses". It's pretty intence, it reminded me of Judas!
    This is a prefect example of why I love your writting.
    Jaymi
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      whew! this one really takes my time... im kinda confused of this... all i can say is this might be an expression of guilt i supposed. coz you are trying to escape something from those shouting images and all. well that was an impressive expression of your emotion though i hav to really understand it.
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by eidnyc d_ noble | [ Reply to This ]
      its a very powerful and touching deep into the soul bringing alot back from the past and perhaps the fear of the future.. well done but remember after the dark comes the light
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      Being an ex-catholic I can see how this morbid image can affect ones thoughts. It's the guilt thing they drum in us from birth. I thought you wrote this very well, the pace and imagery are very good. I had no trouble following the story of this poor catholic boy who is so very naughty that Jesus has to come and tell him to his face what a worthless piece of sh-t he is. Nice work!
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved reading this and your images are right on the money. This is a frightning and surreal poem on the pervading of the annoited one all around you. GOOD POEM!
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]


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