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The truth of a moment

Author: Tarek Refaat
ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
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one of my past experiences dropped from the ink of my pen to the paper.. i hope you all enjoy it..

The truth of a moment

standing here.. feeling the pains of all my times flowing through me..
and i look at your picture..
you haven't hurt me but the will inside me to fight for you
is stronger.. deeper than anything i've ever felt..
the tears sliding down my cheeks..
as i shiver standing in my place looking at the mirror..
i can't let go..
no i won't ..
why ? cause my love for you can never run dry this easily..
never was i a quitter..
i can lose and i've lost before..
but i'll fight till the bitter end..
its how my whole life has been
trying to prove am worthy..
and that i deserve that chance..
and that i can be of use..
the tears flowing even more..
my heart racing...
i know i'll never change..
the fighter in me is what kept me going ..
even when i hit the dirt..
and when my face was stepped on in the mud..
its my pride..
my dignity ..
my heart..
mind and soul which kept me going..
nothing has ever really came easy for me..
and i don't let go easily of the few beautiful things in my life..
knowing my heart will always beat .. even if it bleeds..
and no matter what is the number of the scars that scar it
now or forever..
i love you and i won't give you up..
even if you walk out the door
and show up no more..
at least i loved you with pride..
i tried to turn the tide
i've always stood against the wave..
and i will even more because my heart.. my love , my mind
my beliefs.. is what make me..
and if i lose one of those ..
i won't be me..
and this is when i die..
i shall be me ..
i shall love you now and forever..
you are the bright sun of my life..
the smile breaks out on my face as i stand infront of the mirror..
i can feel the energy that kept me going for years and time..
and will keep me going..
i'm here
i'm standing
i shall not fall
i shall not die..
well its not my time yet..
and when my time will come
i will die with a smile on my face..
and my heart will still beat of love to others when it dies...

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  "i love you and i wont give you least i loved you with pride." that line was picturing a great willpower and i see you as a man with a bunch of faith and pride. well your poem just express your being you in love and i agree with danshilton in some point. well keep it up! simple but impressive.
| Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by eidnyc d_ noble | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't really know about the "pains of my times." And "the bitter end" is a bit cliché. I would have to agree with everything Danshilton wrote. Good write, though.
| Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Abby Sinthetic | [ Reply to This ]
  I really enjoyed your post. I can tell that it really came from your heart and that's always the best kind of writing.

'm here
i'm standing
i shall not fall
i shall not die..

It's just really powerful. Congradulations. It was excellent!
| Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by E. M. Dougherty | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this write, I think it is fantastic. It provoked so many emotions, which I think is a sign of a great poem. Nice work. The only thing I would say is that you use "..." maybe too much and it seems to take away from the parts of the poem where the pauses really work. Other than that great work, keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Star_searcher | [ Reply to This ]

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