Description: shhhhhhh......only you and I can understand
Underneath the Lich -------------------------------------------
Entanglements amongst the tiniest minds
Replenishments as the Lich finds it dines
Alkaline moonshine within the carcass of the swine
like wine the taste is sweet yet deadly by design
You swallowed all I had to give
Hollow as you run like a fugitive
co-operatively committing uninformed suicide
inoperable wounds just another rhyming homicide
unapplied formaldehyde sits along the wayside
YOU
the one reading at home
I can hear your heart beating like a metronome
Brimstone & Hellfire heating up your backbone
you moan in the unknown, prone all alone
wishing to atone for even looking at my throne
Hellbent on finding the cleverest rhyme
torments your past while you suffer in the meantime
you climb the side of a towering inferno
a paradigm of punishment to the $upernal
Amusement
If only you could visualize what I'm seeing
Crystallize your puny frame before the Celestial Being
Break you into pieces before you think of fleeing
then sweep you up while your family is pleeing
and to the overrated premadonna atop this acropolis
The Lichs eye's are upon you awaiting to unleash
Apocolypse
Wow, that is really good. It says two things to me (and I could be wrong about both). First it tells me you are into rap, well maybe hip hop (not much difference in the mainstream anymore). Second it says you were a D&D kid at one time, or at the very least you liked RPG video games.
A weird mixing of inspirations that has lent itself to you very well here. You have skills, it cannot be denied.
This is amazing. YOu have truly outdone yourself this time. Everything flowed together with the intent of a rhyme but came out pure poetry. this is something down to the core and you just spilled it out onto the page and it all works. All of it. Man you did a really good job on this one.
holy fvcking Skillz- the mastermind behind these rhymes. Dammit man my head is still reeling.
I am prepared to witness this in all it's magnificance. You see I see these things and they are intriguing to me. The ferocity shall fall from lips of fiery spit...the viscious magnitude of the cascading impotency that lies in wait of it's wrath.
DAAAMN dude. u r my mentor 4 life homie. lead me in your ways!
where to start.that is awe-inspiring how you kept the atmosphere going throughout the whole verse.this really gives me something to work off of since i can't seen to put together a decent song.
the Lich was handed me my ass and i am humbled i've tumbled down the riverbend serching for a sun dune findin a dark moon and oceans left dry when the sky opens up and the war ends in a tie ~nahlij
the reason - which is perhaps what you would like to know - that i like this poem, - rather than me just SAYING that i like it - has something to do with it's voice/way of shouting out of the page (if we call this a page). It definately does have a kind of voice you can hear if you read it, which changes in intonation according to word choice and rhythmn, and somehow you managed this without killing it with the rhyme. You have obviously drawn from a vast number of subjects/images which adds life...like what you do. Stay (though im sure you wont need me to tell you) different! ellisa :)
Submission Name: Underneath the Lich
