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    dots Submission Name: ThE DoG ToLd Me!¿dots
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    Author: SKillz_Heckle
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Tha BRIARWOOD!!
    Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 268/173/39
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       The Dog told me........


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    dotsThE DoG ToLd Me!¿dots
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    I awoke midnight from my dark dark sleep
    sweat beads on my head blood stains on the sheet
    I jumped into the shower and washed myself clean
    I think I'm going crazy if you know what I mean
    This is the third time I saw blood in my bed
    I check myself for cuts and found I never bled
    I don't enjoy this
    So scared it's like I suffer from paralysis

    I can't handle this

    I go into the kitchen to drink a bottle of JD
    that's when I feel the dog watching me
    I look at him...staring into my soul
    with a grip like the type that will never let go
    lips are moving...is the dog trying to speak
    It's telling me the future and the outlook is bleak
    what to do...murdered by my own brother¿
    ¿I can't kill another, and what about my mother?
    she'll hate me if I really do what it says
    I have to convelesce
    ..................
    wait a minute.......
    ...............
    DOGS Don't talk!
    at least that's what I thought
    the fleabag turned around, and told me to rot
    it said "the word canine is rarely used isn't that odd"
    "Don't you know dog backwards is God?"
    And that's what he is! "I'll do what you say"
    "I'll Kill my little brother JD, today"
    "For not Petting you and picking up a stray"..
    ....that's all I remember, I just blacked out
    no more nothing, he turned my lights out
    then I woke midnight from my dark dark sleep
    sweat beads on my head blood stains on my sheet




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      Nuts...the fvcked up part about it is that this stuff actually happens. Was it Bundy that thought his dog was talking to him? Maybe not, but I know it was a serial killer...the damn dog told him to kill. Crazy> But then again this God guy speaks to certain people in crazy ways...like through coconuts and grilled cheese sandwiches. That grilled cheese sold for $22,000.00 Now the Virgin Mary's an entrepreneur.
    Go Figure.
    Great work
    -Kristina
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]
      omg i really like that one.
    serious question:do u n JD fvckin h8 each other??
    no matter.
    content>terrific
    rhyme>terrific
    concept>stupendous
    that [censored] put a hex on me/ n i feel like killing my bro, ill look for the blood stains in my sheets/
    ~nahlij
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was interesting. You seem to have a very "different" mind. I would not want to be on an elevator with you when it shut down. j/j lol This was good. I guess he blacks out and kills. Then wakes up and doesn't remember. Good. Write a movie. They need somone new now that Stephen King retired.
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that was very disturbing. made me think of Son of Sam who, if i remember correctly, claimed the dog told him to kill those people... this is very haunting. you have quite an imagination. watch out for that JD, too... it'll turn on ya when you least expect it, and then you'll really start hearing things! lol... just kiddin', sort of... very compelling write.
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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