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    dots Submission Name: Devil's Advocatedots
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    Author: Transcendancing
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 365/214/35
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Inspired by the word "Challenging" in a personality concentration excercise I did recently for work.


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    dotsDevil's Advocatedots
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    I question...
    demanding
    Turn around and Look!
    From a different direction,
    I won't let you,
    Sit and assume,
    You are absolutely right.
    I am your conscience...
    I am your doubt...
    In your own superiority -
    And I will challenge you.


    Jaunita Landéesse
    11/04




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      I'm nto entirely sure if I would have chosen the conscience as a theme for "challenge". Speaking from a personal perspective, I seem to have make a deal with my conscience: We're pals now. We haggle over things rather than challenge-response. Sigh. It's all very sad for my virtuous soul. :)

    Still, loved the piece. Great flow and use of punctuation. (Although you might want to throw out the comma after "Sit and assume," because the next sentence is about the assumption).

    Hope to read more of you work; I liked this one very much.

    Peace,

    O
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Occam | [ Reply to This ]
      That happens sometimes when you use the semicolon inappropriately (;) change those to commas and you should get rid of the &#8230's

    Hope this helps..

    -Kristina
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]
      "Turn around and Look!
    From a different direction,"

    What great advice, so true. Having spent time woking on new ideas (products), I can't count how many times a "different" perspective would change things, from what they were, to something greater.
    I think you capture the essence of "challenge".
    To initiate something and to have it be complete. To fulfill its function in all of its aspects. Well done!
    | Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]



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