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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       this is a limerick. its my first one.
    the key is to have the first, second and fifth line to be 8 syllables, and the ending words rhyme.
    Then the middle lines are to only be 6 syllables long and those two lines have to rhyme.
    I am doing this cause a friend asked me to learn how to do it.
    So if you know anything about it tell me. thanks

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    She sings low in Muldon.
    She looks to see a balloon.
    the balloon it pops.
    Her singing stops.
    She curled into a cocoon.

    Submitted on 2004-11-23 03:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thing's can disapear so quickly and leave us broken. I know nothing about limeriks so I cant recomend anything, any kind of change. I thought limeriks were just drunken song's fumbled over in bars and pubs, you just changed my mind.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]
      wow so much movement in such a short piece! great job! i really enjoyed it writing limericks is hard! but u did an awesome job!
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes moments give so much that once it leaves we feel like we've lost it forever. and there is this feeling of lonliness as it hits us that the moment can never return...

    good job.

    so much given within a short piece
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]

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