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    dots Submission Name: I Don't Know If I Love Herdots
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    Author: Jimma
    ASL Info:    22/m/Melb Aust
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 217/234/54
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       OK, This is actually entitled. 'I Don't Know If I Love Her (Or If I Just Want To Fuck Her)', but that wouldn't fit in the title box. The story is basically that sometimes my overly idealistic and romanticised viewpoint pisses even me off.


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    dotsI Don't Know If I Love Herdots
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    I donít know if I love her
    Or if I just want to fuck her
    But fuck, I want to get with her again
    I did something I shouldnít have
    But I donít regret it
    Iíd do the same, I donít care where, I donít care when

    Iím sick of being romantic
    Iím sick of analysing
    Every little moment that we share
    I donít know if I love her
    Or if I just want to fuck her
    But, fuck it, I really donít care

    Sucked in by my libido
    And enjoying every second
    Am I thinking with my heart or with my dick?
    I donít know if I love her
    Or if I just want to fuck her
    But, right now, I just donít give a shit

    Fuck, she is so funny
    Fuck, she is so nice
    And, oh my god, I tell you she is hot
    At first I thought the reason I liked her
    Was because I want to fuck her
    But now Iíve started thinking, maybe not

    Every time I see her
    I think that sheís so sexy
    Every time I see her, I start to like her more
    Maybe I am in love
    But I just donít know it
    Because Iíve never been in love before




    Submitted on 2004-11-23 03:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem it is very raw and to the point. I liked the fact that through the whole poem you were fighting with yourself about which brain you were thinking with...In your head or below your belt. Good flow of words. I just over all really liked this peice. GREAT WORK!
    *Amanda*
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by fortressofwords | [ Reply to This ]
      The common language really makes this an endearing poem. You say your constent romanticism and over analytical nature piss you off, well just dive in headfirst, excuse the pun.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, can deff see your point, very straighfoward (as carver said) its a good poem though! good job on it,

    Am I thinking with my heart or with my dick?

    one of the few guys to actually think which part of him hes thinking with! lol great job!
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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