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    dots Submission Name: TheTruthdots

    Author: Jimma
    ASL Info:    22/m/Melb Aust
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 217/234/54
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This ones sorta self explanatory. Let me know what you think.

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    What sacrifice it seems
    In a world of skin-deep words
    To speak the truth
    Like superficial promises
    Of momentary resolve
    Kind words speak nothing of actuality
    But seem so comfortably reassuring
    But what joy is to be found in comfort?
    What happiness can exist
    In truthful words unspoken?
    In truth comes true happiness
    Truth is love and my truth is you
    Unspoken deceit may be easier
    But on the surface only
    Truth is happiness
    And you are the only truth I know
    So truth must be spoken
    Forsaking lies
    Because only in love
    And my dreams of you
    The truth.

    Submitted on 2004-11-23 03:55:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I realise I'm not the first to say this but the line: "Truth is love and my truth is you" is truly exquisite, and truly makes the piece, for me. My fascination is not with personalised poems lately, but rather more abstract ones, this one has successfully gained my interest and appreciation. Nice write...
    | Posted on 2004-11-24 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]
      "Truth is beauty, beauty truth" Whoever said that was right. Your poem resounds this in a pretty original way useing your personality to fill the poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww i love this!

    What happiness can exist
    In truthful words unspoken?

    thats my fave line, made me shiver, great job i really really like this poem! my fave now!
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      truth is love..amen to that...and more than that truth is not a superficial thing...it is always deeper than anything else...to take upon the challenge of talking about truth is indeed some remarkable deed and it is actually so easy.
    nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by k kin | [ Reply to This ]
      love is often overrated but it is so influential that the truth is actually under its finger. when often poked the truth can be undone of made clear depending on intensity.

    so much freedom can be given by this kind of release... we often feel weightless if the truth is influenced by such a strong emotion.

    good job.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]

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