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    dots Submission Name: Reconstruction of a Spiritdots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       So this is just another strange thought i was having while laying down.. broken traveler seems to be somewhat like it.. though in this i throw in the storm.. well i hope i can paint this picture in your mind.. the meaning is simple.. i'm sure you can figure it out.. point out what you like and tell me what you think..
    Adam


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    dotsReconstruction of a Spiritdots
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    Again I wonder through memory finding pieces of my broken self..
    It seems everytime I return.. I find something considered lost forever
    Just something here and there.. Things that I never thought i'd see again

    Truly the pain is begining to fade now
    Even though I know the past will always live in me.
    It is a part of me and it always will be.
    Though it does not rule me.... Anymore

    I have hurt three people in my life
    The most terrible thing about it, is that I never wanted to.
    I only wanted to wipe away pain caused by others
    In the end I was left wondering if I caused more

    Again as I wonder through this place a dark tempest echoes on the horizon
    I've been caught in that before
    That is the chaos, the pain that drives me mad
    One that brings the rains, the tears of the soul..

    "Ahh another piece", I can't stay long now..
    This is the storms favorite thought.
    It constantly tears upon this memory..
    I can never forget... Never...





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      This was a really great poem. I can tell how you never meant to hurt anybody and yet you were the main cause for their hurt. Sad... But I liked it. Good write!
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the meaning of this poem very much. You did a really great job describing how so often at one moment in ones life we think that we will feel this way forever but soon we've forgotten all about it. Until...
    Really good write.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, is this a poem about yourself, because I hope not, but I think it might be. I like it a lot, it is nice and deep. I have hurt one too many people and been hurt about a million too many times. This is sad...very sad. Nice job though, I really like the way it flows. Now my breakdown of the poem as I most usually do with the ones I like, I like this one. *smile*

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    Truly the pain is begining to fade now
    Even though I know the past will always live in me.
    It is a part of me and it always will be.
    Though it does not rule me... Anymore
    -I really like this one, kind of relates back to me as you would most likely know...by now. I too know that I have move on, forget about the past, forget about everything that has happened to me. It is so hard to forget though because you know it is still a part of who you are. Nice pictures here, I saw a lot. When I can replace the character and stick myself right in that is when I really like a poem. Great, this is an awesome verse.

    Again I wonder through memory finding pieces of my broken self..
    It seems everytime I return.. I find something considered lost forever
    Just something here and there.. Things that I never thought i'd see again
    -I like this one too...I am talking on MSN...therefore...this might be a kind of messed up comment. I keep getting interrupted...

    Truly the pain is begining to fade now
    Even though I know the past will always live in me.
    It is a part of me and it always will be.
    Though it does not rule me... Anymore
    -Already commented on...

    I have hurt three people in my life
    The most terrible thing about it, is that I never wanted to.
    I only wanted to wipe away pain caused by others
    In the end I was left wondering if I caused more
    -I really love this one, it expressed everyone's feelings when they hurt someone accidentally. And do not mean to do it, but when they try to mend the pain they only end up causing more.

    Gosh...I am interrupted again...sorry...bai bai for now!
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]


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