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    dots Submission Name: where to begin?dots

    Author: grinninggashes
    ASL Info:    17/f/from sumwhere :)
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 154/124/25
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1168
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    dotswhere to begin?dots

    I don't know where to begin..
    but now that i have you back again
    im scared to lose you to another her
    i always thought wed be together for sure
    dealing wtih all them lies left me doing nothing but to cry
    and left with one question but why
    i really thoght we were the perfect math
    alls thats left is to mend my heart with a patch
    i never thoght you'd leave me
    people said if it was meant to be
    that wed get through it eventually
    now im scared the past will repeat itself
    leaving me all by myself

    Submitted on 2004-11-23 12:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Another winner but a few corrections if you dont mind. On the thoughts you spelled it wrong you forgot the u and in math you forgot the h. great job.
    love christina
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it but it needs to be fixed. There is no real rhythm. It was good, don't get me wrong. I just think that you need to find the real rhythm and fix some lines and typos. I kept wanting to read "wed" instead of "we'd". I liked it as a rough draft. Good job!
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      You have quite a few typos, slow the hell down, lmao... other than that, its not bad, probably because I know the background of the poem, perhaps give somewhat of a description so other people who don't know you personally will better understand it... keep writing!
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]

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