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    dots Submission Name: Leftdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 757
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    Bytes: 646



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    My dad left me as a baby
    not even leaving me diapers
    see him later driving the viper
    I'm hyper
    Going as fast as type writer
    Need wipers to wipe these tears
    Got my fly clothes at Sears
    I have no peers
    So now listen here
    "My dad left me as a baby
    Not even leaving me diapers"
    "See him later driving the viper"
    I've been here 15 years
    want to fight me
    fight these tears
    death is near
    Why did you leave me with this queer
    Now 15 years later
    You wan to come here
    Just to learn my fears




    Submitted on 2004-11-23 20:35:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was an okay one but i think it couldbe alot better if it was longer.to me it seems a little unpersonal if it wa about you.if not then it makes sense.but i thinkit would be better.i know it hard my dad is gone to but i think more heart needs to be put into it
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      so it's about a father that left his child and then comes back many years later. not bad not good either. It could of been more but what do I know.
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      I have already read this. Well I'm the one that showed you how to write your stuff so that its easier for people to read it. Well [censored] I dont know what else to say. Keep writing. We gotta write somethin sometime together.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]


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