She laps
and tastes
and teases...
Tongue and lips and teeth
A tiny orchestra
Intent on claiming
his attention
Provoking his reaction
Insatiable distraction.
i agree with the comment about castration. i was very short, but i was strait forward. the word do weave around the subject. its very interesting, the wake-up call that it leaves the mind. you accomplised what i believe you wanted it to. i can most certainly understand that he would be out of his damn mind not be distracted by this. good job.
Now that is certainly something to wake up to early in the morning. A distraction that would certainly get a reaction. . Very nicely written with a lyrical sense of rhythm. A real eye opener, if you know what I mean, yaaaawwwwnnn!
She laps and tastes and teases... Tongue and lips and teeth A tiny orchestra Intent on claiming his attention Provoking his reaction Insatiable distraction.
This is a really short and sweet piece, yet at the same time, intensely detailed and evocative. The rhythm and rhymes add to the sense of passion and intensity perfectly. Not too often i enjoy such a short piece of writing, but this one a certainly did. Thanx for you words. =Jimma=
Submission Name: Distraction
. Very nicely written with a lyrical sense of rhythm. A real eye opener, if you know what I mean, yaaaawwwwnnn! 