Description: i apologize to those who are complaining about my choice of words. i must tell you i have read poems on this site with far worse and way more usage of them than this. besides kids aren't stupid, most of them talk like that now. but i do apologize if this offends you, that's not the point of it. and no never been in this situation thank god for that. (yes i believe in god even with those words being used.)
I think the poem is funny. But I have just one question, what if the whore was infected with A.I.D.S. or something and you wanted one more screw, but you payed the price. I dunno just a thought. :P LeAnna
I do not mind language in poems. They help to truly express your feelings at the time of write. If people don't like the language then they can write their own "clean" work. Every artist has their own ways of expression. Now about the poem itself...I understand. I can see my version of you yelling at this *sshole telling him to get the f*ck out. I would have written the same way. Good job!
wow this is great-kinda funny. my boyfriend cheated on me and i couldnt understand why cuz..im a nympho-shhh...so i gave him plenty but he did it anyways...i ahte guys... i really liked this and i plan to show it to him. -sweet
Dont listen to morons who think you shouldn't swear. I myself never swear on poetry, because I just dont think they match. If you do.. then do so. You shouldnt apologize in your description.. gives the impression that you think you're wrong.. that you're doing something wrong.. and this encourages idiots to bash your work. You're doing nothing wrong.. Im not a big fan.. though am kinda horny. Sex is a terrible viscious thing.. goddamn it is it ever.. its horrible.. yet.. you know. I JUST dont like the usage of the word "baby" in the end.. dont like word when not used towards an actual baby. heh.. good write you
lol. I love this piece. The anger, humor and imagery are extremely well done. I really love the last line; quite unexpected. If you're in this situation, I'm sorry. In this case, however, it gave you some wonderful poetry. J
that was a clever ending...i don't know why i like this poem...it's very comedic, thats probably why. some parts of this poem seemed forced like you didn't quite have anything thought of to put next like...
You left with her Didnít care anymore So you [censored]ed her in my bed And you [censored]ed her on my floor!
it just didn't quite have the flow like the rest of the poem did. but that's just a small rock in the big blue sea...nice and funny keep writing
What happens when lies set in and lust takes over. To the point and self-expanatory, I liked this write because of this. How many times I have seen this played out with friends of mine. It's pretty much a statement on society and the mindset . Thanks, Alan
ok... i loved the honesty and fact that you didnt hide one simple detail. i also enjoyed the fact that you didnt make us fellow readers read b/w the lines ,even though i dont mind. it was very well worded and i enjoyed the realistic uncensorship. frankly, noone is going to talk about that subject with that much emotion and not have a few "beeps" and yes i do apoligize if you indeed are in this situation life sucks... but yet you want to squeeze as much out of it as possible hint the last line