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    dots Submission Name: never ment todots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 703
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    Description:
       thoughts of words


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    dotsnever ment todots
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    I never meant to hurt you
    All I did was like you
    Would you listen to me if I where in trouble
    Can't we be a pair
    Sit down that there chair
    "I never meant to hurt you
    All I did was like you"
    If you care for me I would care for you
    Why did you sleep with the mayor?
    should I say a prayer
    but is that fair
    I don't know anything anymore
    A brother should have a father
    should of, cold of, would of,
    becomes the worst words to a kid to hear from there father
    remember that leather
    going across heather
    I sure due
    You pick the leather up like a feather
    I meant to be nice but
    I could not fight to save her life
    How nice to remember you being afraid of mice
    You screaming breaking the lights
    Lets fuck till day light
    We can take the next flight
    how come your bag is so light
    You don't care about the height
    As long it's not turned to the right
    You thought I was the knight in Shining armor for you
    I all I did for was take hike away from u
    " meant to be nice but
    I could not fight to save her life"




    Submitted on 2004-11-24 15:59:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the rhyming is a little weird
    typo-"should of, cold of, would of,"
    some of the things don't flow in subject, it sounds all over the place.... very interesting poem

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      it would be some funyn [censored] if she cheated with the mayor.i think that would be halarious.srry if thats mean its not meant to be.ut i get the point that the girl cheated.im sorry that you date these girls that end up hurting you.but this was good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats pretty sad if your girl was gonna cheat on you with the mayor. I know its not true but that would be some funny [censored] and I would laugh my ass off at you. Alright well keep writing and I will see you later.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats pretty sad if your girl was gonna cheat on you with the mayor. I know its not true but that would be some funny [censored] and I would laugh my ass off at you. Alright well keep writing and I will see you later.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]


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