Breaking Your Chain -------------------------------------------
I used to pride myself on my ability to survive
Thinking always it is enough that I was alive
But I've changed, as people always do
And I've grown away from the anchor of you
I know now where it is that heaven can be found
But I cannot reach it; chained by you to the ground
I know what it takes to finally feel alive
You see living means more than the ability to survive
It means rushing headlong to meet each day
Having no regrets, no chains, along the way
So I'm sorry if I have broken your heart
But I must leave to have the chance to start
I like the images you've made of being held back by someone. I've always thought of it as hitching your wagon to a dead mule...I can relate. Your structure and rhyme worked very well, but I would agree with Gadfly that the last line could be reworked to make the piece even better. Might I suggest something like: 'the chain must be broken for my journey to start.' Just a thought...take it for what its worth. ;) Happy Thanksgiving!
very straight forward. you pulled no punches here.I can relate to this it was my decision at 16 and 19 it was time to live not just survive...just surving at that age was killing me. I like this poem alot.