Our Gift

Author: arkay ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450 /320 /56 Words: 65

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Our Gift

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Seasons in blossom a short time to stay, each offering its beauty then taken away. Shed not some tears for what has been lost, treasures surrounding shall cover the cost. Wonders beholding to those who aspire to seek out the beauty each season inspires. Taken for granted we sometimes forget life’s simple pleasures are a gift to us yet.

Submitted on 2004-11-25 08:51:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wonderful! absolutely beautiful my friend... This is deffinately a pice to inspire, and i would love to make it one of my favorites. I've been slackin on my comments but i had to take the time for this one. Its flow is as beautiful as the meaning behind it... A true work of art. Fantastic! thank you for sharing it with us... I hope to hear from you and i hope you check out some o' mine as well... Adios! Travis

| Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]

when nature is at its best it truly is a treasure, a gift from above, and when nature is at its worst, it still has the ability to make you go WOW, this piece is a true definition of nature and you also point out that not many people take notice. so congrats on a job well done

| Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]

it was short and to the point. yet so pretty and light, which is a nice change to some of the heavy stuff coming out lately. I like that it, while representing the seasons, it also represents transition in general. It also made me laugh because when its summer I miss winter and when it's winter, I miss summer, It's crazy. I also remember as a kid hating the end of summer and being so sad that it was gone only to find that I loved autumn even more. This was great, the rhyming and scheme were as natural and the topic of the peice. And that picture you've got at the top is pretty funky. I like both.

| Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by ariadne | [ Reply to This ]

this really can encompass so many, sooo many different themes. I almost had the feelings you were talking about saving the environment in the second stanza, about how it will never be able to cover the cost with all of our money... i may be wrong but it fit quite nicely. at the end you wrapped it up very nicely, into a nice neat little bow, but you also didnt over do it, at any time in the poem. Although it did not surprise me with it's content, it really is a great model to do other poems justice, with how you set it up, and most of the rhyming schemes and how well the WHOLE thing flowed, not just a few lines and somebody said "hey it flowed well". great write, and never let your poetry be ordinary

| Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by Josh | [ Reply to This ]

aah..beautiful. Personally I love rhyme so your deft use of word works for me. And yes, simple pleasures are the best.

| Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by adamastor | [ Reply to This ]

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