I loved that first line, 'eject, reject, push rewind." I thought it was really original and made for an amazing opener for this poem. The rest was good too but I felt like it became sort of clichéd, at least in teh way that you describe your feelings 'I hate you, but I love you too' I've heard that line in at least a third of the poems that I've read on this site. It's not that I don't use some of these overused lines myself, but in a poem of this legth I'd advise against it. Also, the imagary wasn't too original either, with the exception of maybe that first.
My advice is to go back and take this idea, which definitely has potential, and try to add more imagery and describe these feelings in a new way.
This was a decent poem. I think it sets a great foundation and you should take advantage of that. It has potential to be really amazing. Keep up the good work
This is a Splenda poem. It has all the information of a regular poem, without extra words, that sometimes make poems suck. I like this, it has potential, but maybe adding a little more wouldn't hurt. Let all of your anger out, don't bottle it up or you'll just brake something.
Damn keep going... your rhyming calls for a lot more of it... you cant just end it here. Dont let yourself get carried with the whole ranintg/ venting thing about i hate you/i love you theme,.. little exhausted but if you lengthen it and prove it wrong.. you can def. go places with it.. GOod start!
I think the first line is the best because it sets the rhythm for the rest of the piece and is also a much more innocent line than the rest of the line, which I think is rather built around that first line. Still, you kept it nice and simple, when you could have gone off onto so many different paths, so kudos for that, and also for an ending I wasn't expecting. Good write!