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    dots Submission Name: 29,199 And Rising...dots

    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       i've wanted to do a song about suicide for awhile now... i finally came up with the perfect intro riff, and i was inspired b a number of different things...

    the title... in 1999, the statistics said that 29,199 of all teen deaths were suicides... i think the rest is implied.

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    dots29,199 And Rising...dots

    Thereís a weight in my hand and a weight in my heart
    I cant, wonít take this, itís my time to depart
    I never thought that it would end this way
    I tried and I failed, and for that Iím sorry

    You never know Ďtil you hit the groundÖ

    My lips spin lies, complex in nature
    Something inside me died long ago
    Donít try and save me, I swear itís too late
    Forget me, let go, do me that favor

    Remember when we all won in the end
    I fought so hard just to fall back again
    Into the confusion that I canít seem to fight
    Iíve had enough, I swear, it will end here tonight

    Prec > C

    Instrumental Bridge

    Thereís a weight in my hand and a weight in my heart
    I cant, wonít take this, itís my time to depart
    Tears blind the eyes that cannot see
    Press the weight to my headÖ I am finally free

    C x 1

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      I too have a hard time imagining what this would sound like. I had a friend commit suicide in high school, and it still affects me. This is really sad. It's sad that people feel like it's the only option.
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      It made me think once again about how relationships work. And how hard it can be to end one. Even when your holding onto something futile.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by closebutremote | [ Reply to This ]
      Free from feeling the way the person does...sometimes you just become so weary from the fight that it seems there is only one way out...i cant guarantee it will get better... but i know that it is possible...suicide is ugly and it is sad but very real...keep writing.. i think this is well written and covers a lot without being completely depressing...well done
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      You never know &#8216;til you hit the ground&#8230;
    Those words are so true.
    Because you never do know til' you hit the ground. Glad to have read this its pretty good.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know fully yet. i only came up with an intro riff on my guitar. probably something soft-ish.

    i am no advocate of suicide. the point was for this song to come out sad.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      free from what into what? suicide by teenagers is just such a sad and disturbing thing. to think that someone believes that they have absolutely no alternative but to kill themselves.

    it is hard, really, to read lyrics because there is no music, so we have to just try to make up our own. being that i am a musician, i'd be curious to know what type of music you had in mind for this. this just made me sad...
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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