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    dots Submission Name: Hangerismsdots
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    Author: VanillaLeaves
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 101/110/23
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       hangers remind me of birds and a woman showed up. What could I do?


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    A woman takes her shawl,
    a piece of silk and feathers,
    off a wire hanger
    and watches a flock of birds wing by
    there are no words for this

    A flock of feathered hangers
    takes flight without a rustle of silk,
    leaving a woman naked
    as a newly hatched bird.

    Like a broken bird
    a hanger lies on the closet floor
    in a wordless flock of bent wire
    and torn silk feathers.
    A woman is angry at this.

    A woman wonders at her birds,
    who roost on a single branch,
    in a wordless line of silk and feathers
    like hangers in a closet.

    Words say that a woman
    wearing her feathered shawl
    over a black silk dress
    can look like bird
    or even a wire hanger.

    A flock of women create words
    of silk and feathers
    as they twitter like birds
    perched on wire hangers.

    There are no words
    for feathered woman
    silken hangers
    of flocks of shawls.




    Submitted on 2004-11-25 17:53:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very interesting look at a banal object, Em, the mark of a gifted writer, to look beyond ordinary, and see the extraordinary.
    I would never have though there could be so many perspectives of feaathers, birds, women and hangers.
    Another incredible idea, another great poem.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this too. I like how it switched back and forth and bled together. The last stanza wrapped it up nicely. This is very unique.
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome, a lil confused but i really enjoyed reading it, it kept me intressted the whole time

    Like a broken bird
    a hanger lies on the closet floor
    in a wordless flock of bent wire
    and torn silk feathers.
    A woman is angry at this.


    i like that part best, dk y just moved me great job!
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not quite sure what this poem means, but it draws me and I like to read it. Its not bad, might need a better description.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting images in this piece. i liekd the way you switched perspective.

    i was confused in the middle of this piece, but the ending tied it all together nicely.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      "Must be a chick thing . . ."

    Ha! You know there's a certain mystique about hangers, clothes, and shoes . . . and closets that we men perhaps will never understand. But we try! Still, this poem is a beautiful window into that secret world. A journey into the mystical link . . . between a woman and her "birds" and all those pretty things she's collected over the years.

    This is a first for me, but I saw the name <VLs> and just couldn't resist <it's wonderful!>

    And so is this . . .
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cleverly done... endless images of limited words... not for the feeble minded I guess. You've done a great job in rearranging the words and creating new dimensions with each stanza. My fav one has to be:
    "A woman wonders at her birds,
    who roost on a single branch,
    in a wordless line of silk and feathers
    like hangers in a closet."
    This can easily stand by itself as well (I love short poems...). This has to be a fav!
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]


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