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    dots Submission Name: The Paintingdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1102
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 453



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    dotsThe Paintingdots
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    Somehow her painting looked perfect
    the beauty hid the sloppy strokes,
    the poor composition,
    The impossibility of the light.
    Somehow her frail body
    remained graceful with age.
    Somehow her mind
    defied her sadness.
    Her scattered thoughts
    remained innovative,
    but she knew
    that artists either
    use their madness constuctively
    or let it take over and self-destruct.




    Submitted on 2004-03-18 01:49:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      should be "constructively"?

    but i love that line..."artists use their madness constructively or let it take over and self-destruct"

    wonderful...and how the artists see beauty in things and people...and they can paint things prettier than they actually are.

    i wonder if poets do that too...if we air brush emotions so they don't feel so bad.

    nice poem...glad i found it..

    felt like reading you

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, thats really pretty, I am glad its a work in progress, because I wanted to keep reading... Great Job!
    | Posted on 2004-03-24 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good concept piece. The redundant use of the word "somehow" holds this poem back. Perhaps you can find more descriptive phrasing to convey the same meaning.

    This has poem has potential.
    | Posted on 2004-03-18 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont really know what else to say but wow.. i really thought this was an awesome peice of work.. i mean im no expert but i know when i like something.. and me likey hehe
    | Posted on 2004-03-18 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]


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