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    dots Submission Name: Same one getting blameddots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsSame one getting blameddots
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    It's always the same
    I'm the one getting blamed
    I don't want the shame
    I can't stand it anymore
    slam the door to the 4 door,saying
    "It's always the same
    I'm the one getting blamed"
    I hate the mind games
    you try to put apon me
    I'm trying to get free
    but you alaways lay down the guilt trip
    some one just rip
    you smack me with the whip
    "It's always the same
    I'm the one getting blamed"




    Submitted on 2004-11-25 21:30:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it does suck to alwys be the one getting blamed.this was good work.keep it up.i usually dont like short poems but this was good.it showed your frustration with the world and its blame.

    Hannah
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one a lot, and i do know how you feel with this one because i have an older brother and a younger sister, so that means that they want me to look up to him and then be a "good" example for my sister and sometimes it just seems that nothing i do or say is ever good enough for them and that just really pisses me off well anyway that is what the poem reminded me of, there is one spelling error but to me it looks like it is just a typo alaways-always and that is the only one, now with you i tell you all the time to put your poems in stanza form but with this one don't it is too short and it looks fine the way it is, the only thing that bothers me is that you have no comas and no periods in this whole piece and you need to put those in so that the reader can pause and then the full meaning of the words will sink in and i'd have to say that my favorite lines would be

    "I'm the one getting blamed"
    I hate the mind games
    you try to put apon me
    I'm trying to get free
    but you alaways lay down the guilt trip"

    and i like these lines so much because it reminds me of what my parents do they yell and have a cow and then they try to hug me and they say i love you and it just really pisses me off you have no clue.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I blame you for getting me kicked out of class all of the time. No im kidding. Well I will just copy polarized and say really deep so much feelings and all kind of bla bla and [censored] like that. Oh yeah but I really do know what its like to be blamed for alot of stuff. I have a little sister. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]


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