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    dots Submission Name: Sun Dancedots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I am native american and this is how i very my life. You see this poem was inspired by me getting my nipples pierced for the sake of knowing that i am always on a path, not willingly, that's different then most. And that i will someday show people the meaning of LOVE.

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    dotsSun Dancedots

    Pierce my soul
    And let me hear the buffalo people.
    Let me know,
    The spring from which honor trickles.

    Let me lean back
    And stretch myself to the sun.
    Sing with spirit�s tack
    Of a sacred air filling my lungs.

    Let my Elders listen
    And Mother Earth cradle me.
    Put a hand print on my chest
    And run out my days, bridle free.

    Come great vision,
    Comfort me in woven dreams.
    Mystery, I am son
    To all the sacred things.

    I�ll bring peace to nations,
    Stop the greed of avarice.
    My dream says to be patient
    And show the people
    The Medicine Wheel of Life.

    Submitted on 2004-11-25 22:45:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have no clue what pierced has to do with this great poem, so many people do that and it has nothing to do with peace or being native American. I really like the poem because you honor you heritage and so want to keep it alive,bravo
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, in fact it's beautiful, but i'm not sure about "trinkles." Do you mean trickles? I agree that this is peaceful. I think it's great to write about your roots. I have some Cherokee blood (although, as Sharky says, I'm pasty). I should learn about my roots and write about them too,
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      lovely. Fine, fine, imagery that just feels so warm and nicely written. As said by Holy Wood, I like how you feel as you have enough love to fill the world. Also, nifty icon
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by brassmonkey2009 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the imagery and the way that you used the words...it almost has a mystical feel..very nicely written..i will have to look at some of your others :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not a big fan of peacefull lovely writing, but I geuss this one isnt that bad, If I liked this type of writing then it would be great.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one. It's peaceful. I like how in the poem you feel as if you have enough peace and love to shower the world. Great piece.
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]

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