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    dots Submission Name: Sleepy Ramblings.dots
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    Author: metalman_21
    ASL Info:    17/m/NE
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 30/42/17
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
    Total Views: 766
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 609



    Description:
        I'm really tired right now, and I kinda just pulled this out of nowhere. It has a meaning, and I'll see if you can figure it out.


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    dotsSleepy Ramblings.dots
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    The clock says 12:00. I say it's time for another coke. You can't party without caffeine. It's just begun. The time slowly stops, as the minute hand becomes a pistol, aimed at the first insomiac in sight...me.
    Shots ring out as I run 'cross the room like a frantic mokey missing a few fingers. A single brass projectile grazes my head, and hits a fire extinguisher on the wall. Great, now there's white shit everwhere.
    As the dust (and the flame-retardant chemicals) clear, I see the bullet-holes all around me, and I think, it's time for a coke.




    Submitted on 2004-11-26 00:08:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok, it was a lil funny. but the meaning is kind of hard to find. but i think i have an idea, is it about how some one is so numb that they just go on trying to do things as if nothing is wrong.
    that was probably way off, but worth a try. nice write even for being tired.
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by DenyAblecure | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol, this made me laugh.. so much laughter tonite, maybe it was the bawls I drank.. Hahaha...Great piece not sure if i got what your trying to put out.But it was intresting and good

    _(-!Cheers!-)_
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]


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