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    dots Submission Name: Your stupid...Beautiful.dots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Another night, another adventure in the life of Tara Starr.

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    dotsYour stupid...Beautiful.dots
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    I now know that I am stupid.
    Completely.
    Entirely.
    Fantastically.
    Beautifully stupid.

    It was inside me.
    The cork was pulled.
    It was inside.

    My mother always told me...
    I was stupid.
    Good for nothing.
    Useless.
    A complete waste of fucken time.

    Now I know she was right.
    I am beautifully stupid.

    Dangerously stupid.

    Beautifully Pregnant.




    Submitted on 2004-11-26 04:18:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah, this was a very nice poem, and I say this because I recently have had much of the same emotions. When you fall in love with someone you are not supposed to fall in love with, one feel stupid, and insane.. Still, we all are beatufyl arent we? Because we do love. Too much love cant hurt, I guess...

    Good work!
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      Firstly, i dunno if you actually feel the things you have described in this poem. Possibly you do sometimes, we all feel stupid on occasion. But having read and commented on some of your other work also, i can categorically state that you are anything but stupid. The poem itself is very enjoyable, very well written and easy to read, good rhythm and flow. I wasn't expecting the turn you took in the last line, but minus that line, i know exactly what you are saying. Sometimes there is a beautiful innocence in people which is too easily taken for stupidity. That was what i got out of this first stanza:

    'I now know that I am stupid.
    Completely.
    Entirely.
    Fantastically.
    Beautifully stupid'

    Thanx for your words.

    =Jimma=
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Jimma | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure how to take this one. Sad, because your description of your mother telling you that you are stupid is an all too familiar scene(Not just mothers, parents in general).
    Sadder still that these words have sunk in to make you believe them.
    And as for the ending, I'm not quite sure if you are still putting yourself down or are perhaps a bit happy that you are pregnant, and in a sense good for something.
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]
      I love tis line
    My mother always told me...
    I was stupid.
    Good for nothing.
    Useless.
    A complete waste of [censored]en time.
    keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, you don't expect thelast line, but then after reading it I can see why you wrote what you did at the start. As Mer_de_Noms said it is written in a modern way but also in a very raw and particular way. Very good write. Beckie xx
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Burnt Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      you are writing in a very modern way, not so wordy to be exact... *gosh i dont know what im saying...* its straight to the point, and never let the reader hanging in the end... nice. pls check out my work if you dont mind... tnx!
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Mer_de_Noms | [ Reply to This ]


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