Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: You'll be finedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 758
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1327



    Description:
       thought from others


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYou'll be finedots
    -------------------------------------------


    You'll be fine
    just give it time
    listen to the chime
    Stop and listen to your mind
    stop and give a dime to the man on the street
    why you sitting there looking into the cam
    It's all just scam
    If you cheated on your man
    "you'll be fine"
    "Now just give it time"
    It should be a fine
    to let a girl you love stand
    in a land which can be the badlands
    It's like being stuck in quicksand
    I'll give you a hand
    "you'll be fine"
    "Now just give it time"
    Lets leave every thing behind
    lets try 69
    "You'll be fine"
    "Now just give it time"
    Don't hide
    come on have some pride
    we can go to Hawaii ride some high tides
    besides I told you
    "you'll be fine"
    "just give it time"
    you should feel good
    You got me wondering how you get so fly.
    Now don't cry
    "you'll be fine"
    "just give it time"
    Always will be here night and day
    "you'll be fine"
    "just give it time"
    "just..... give it time....... i will always love you.




    Submitted on 2004-11-26 12:54:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I really like it. Wonderful job. I'm not one to read lyrics, but i really enjoied this. Thanks for letting me know it was done. Keep up the fantastic job.

    Ja ne
    Akia_Ame
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      You put a lot of references in there that didnt really fit but maybe if you revised it and talk about what the quicksand has to do with love. Or stuff like that if you need and advice just ask me and ill show you how to do that stuff and keep it in your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      You put a lot of references in there that didnt really fit but maybe if you revised it and talk about what the quicksand has to do with love. Or stuff like that if you need and advice just ask me and ill show you how to do that stuff and keep it in your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    34648

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Promise written by annie0888
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    untitled written by Chelebel
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Incubus written by monad
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Bond written by saartha
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry