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    dots Submission Name: You'll be finedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsYou'll be finedots
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    You'll be fine
    just give it time
    listen to the chime
    Stop and listen to your mind
    stop and give a dime to the man on the street
    why you sitting there looking into the cam
    It's all just scam
    If you cheated on your man
    "you'll be fine"
    "Now just give it time"
    It should be a fine
    to let a girl you love stand
    in a land which can be the badlands
    It's like being stuck in quicksand
    I'll give you a hand
    "you'll be fine"
    "Now just give it time"
    Lets leave every thing behind
    lets try 69
    "You'll be fine"
    "Now just give it time"
    Don't hide
    come on have some pride
    we can go to Hawaii ride some high tides
    besides I told you
    "you'll be fine"
    "just give it time"
    you should feel good
    You got me wondering how you get so fly.
    Now don't cry
    "you'll be fine"
    "just give it time"
    Always will be here night and day
    "you'll be fine"
    "just give it time"
    "just..... give it time....... i will always love you.




    Submitted on 2004-11-26 12:54:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like it. Wonderful job. I'm not one to read lyrics, but i really enjoied this. Thanks for letting me know it was done. Keep up the fantastic job.

    Ja ne
    Akia_Ame
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      You put a lot of references in there that didnt really fit but maybe if you revised it and talk about what the quicksand has to do with love. Or stuff like that if you need and advice just ask me and ill show you how to do that stuff and keep it in your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      You put a lot of references in there that didnt really fit but maybe if you revised it and talk about what the quicksand has to do with love. Or stuff like that if you need and advice just ask me and ill show you how to do that stuff and keep it in your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]


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