Great job. Being happy is very hard but it is so rewarding. Being a downer is depressing and makes others not want to be around you. I'm one of those people that tries to make everyone smile, even if it's making fun of myself. It's so much fun but rewarding to make others happy, especially rewarding to yourself. You've done a great job with this. Too many people are writing depressing things on this site so it's good to see a change. :) Great job. Spread the happiness. -blt
A perfectly optimistic expression. Too often my crazy optimistic attitude by some lousy kid named Will. What is more rewarding than happiness, eh? It's one of the few things we should live for, and there's lots of living left to do so let's be getting happy. You fought against the stream with good style here. Those single word lines do well to drive home what it takes to overcome. Power to the positive! ... It's something I look forward to.
Very positive. It reminds me of those big posters you see in offices. "Be Successful", "Never give up". This is very warming. It is good to read something like this when times might be down. I think the people writing about death and hate need to read this.
yeah baby! thats AWESOME! par of it is me already... im always dancing... always the starter of the dancefloor at them boring parties... happiness is the most rewarding and the hardest to persue but yeah... if you can laugh at yourself i think you got a key... i just say GO YOU! good luck with it and thanx for the encouragement/challenge to do the same! peace out!
this is cool. the next time you write a piece, you should write about soap. what I mean by that is:
this piece is a cool piece don't get me wrong, and I like it, and also, I think it has a cool little beat, which is tight. but it seems to be caught up in the cares of this life too much. write one about soap, and when you do, kick back and relax, and don't worry 'bout a damn thing. let your most concerned thought be about a bar of soap. how much concern can there be in a thought about soap?
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my point is this: soap is a care free subject, which, when undertaken in poetry, can be mutilated by your mind. you can say literally WHATEVER you want.
It's a cute little ditty and it was uplifting. The line breaks and pauses make for a nice easy read. I do like the way you bookended it by structuring the first and last stanzas in the way that you did, both at four lines, seeming to contain the more open lines within. I'm not sure I would have liked it as much if you hadn't done that.