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    dots Submission Name: The Tables Have Turneddots
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    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I like to have thoughts about what I write. It's greatly appreciated. This again, not from personal expierience, but I was deeply into it as i wrote it.



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    You come to me on a lonely night,
    You look into my eyes,
    you ask if you can have this dance,
    i feel your presence against me,
    i look away.
    i am scared you won't like me,
    But you persist,
    you tell me how beautiful i am,
    but i only resist,
    i try to forsee the future,
    could this love truely exist?
    i want to believe it,
    but i don't.
    I know you're just playing me,
    but i go on,
    i do have fun with you,
    we go on with our times,
    you come over, we do our thing,
    to me this is just fine,
    i want to look at you as more,
    but these feelings i know i must ignore,
    so you insist on bringing me flowers?
    Why, you fool, look at you!
    Can't you see i'm in on your game?
    One day i bring it up,
    for i am through with this shame,
    you tell me your madly in love with me,
    as a tear scrolls down your cheek,
    why didn't i notice?
    the answer was bleek.
    I've played the player,
    or so i thought,
    but now it looks different,
    the game, it was not.
    And now this bad reputation I have earned,
    Oh my, how the tables have turned.




    Submitted on 2004-11-27 17:57:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOAH...this is, i dont know..its really good..
    i like the way you just let it all flow together, like you were letting it all out...its sad, but true sometimes...love and life are both crazy...well hope you find someway to redeem yourself from the bad reputation you've earned...bye...
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this theme may be called a self-fulfilling prophesy. things are seen with filters, then when the true light shines on them, they arent what you thought.
    great theme; and loads of emotion in this piece.
    keep at the writing!
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      this is beeautiful,James you always do such a great job, I guess it runs in the family little brother.You are the one.I want to know who it is about.Oh and my peom is about holly,I hate that [censored]
    | Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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