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    dots Submission Name: Fuck this,this school sucksdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 213
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       pissed at my home work and wanted take time off and write.

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    dotsFuck this,this school sucksdots

    If you want to row with me.
    Smack your teacher with an eraser
    Chase them around with a stapler
    Stand upon the table
    Saying, "Fuck this, this school sucks"
    Bring a gun to school
    Every one screaming and running.
    While I am saying, "Fuck this, this school"
    What do you mean I use to be cool?
    Went around the school breaking all the cellos.
    While I am saying, Fuck this, this school sucks
    My parents say school good for you
    All there doing is trying help you.
    Fuck school
    I'm here to rule
    Now come row with me
    God sent me to piss off the world
    And looks I'm doing a good job.
    Fuck it
    Need to go back and say my bad
    But I never take back what I said
    "Fuck this, this school sucks"
    Every time I get a suspension there is more tension
    Rather have detention.
    Comprehension whats that.
    All the teachers are not ready for what I'm going to do
    There not going have clue what hit them
    It takes respect to get respect
    Crack and smack just a couple of problems at this school
    I'm not a fool
    I got the whole school saying
    "Fuck this, this school sucks"

    Submitted on 2004-11-27 19:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was funny i love the part about chasing the teacher with a stapler and smacking here with an eraser.it funny to think about a student doing that.great jobb on this one.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      Man I know where you coming from a little bit, and I noticed how you took some of Eminem's views and tossed them around in there. Sometimes we feel as if the world doesn't undestand us, so we just say [censored] everything cause we don't want to follow rules or nothing but at times that's all we can do, but we can also stand out from others. So, keep up the good work, cause this is an unique style of writing.
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by Cassandra Pack | [ Reply to This ]
      ok first of all whats so bad about it. if its as bad as the grammar and wording in this poem, then i understand what your're saying. if you are gonna be this angry at least try to be original. i noticed a few Eminem sayings in this piece. but hey you had the imagery, you have the readers feeling your madness, but you might what to include why we should be pissed. that might help a little bit. give us a reason to say this school sucks. otherwise good job on venting, just work out a few kinks, and you could have a pretty good piece.
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      just to say you cheated for emotion. using words like **** is the easy way out of developing an emotion your reader can relate, and there is just too much of it, its something that the reader has to just keep puching his way through, forcing themself to read on. Yes theres passion in the piece, and venting this way is a lot better then venting with what the poem suggests, so theres a point for you, I guess. I'm not trying to be cynical, I just don't agree with you, or the way you wrote it, but hey, its been a rough day. Just look at school in a different way, if you hate it, you hate it because you don't want to like it, the more you try to like it, the more you'll see the good things. Its true

    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]
      I disagree with those 2 maniacs. This peice kicks ass. I hate school as well. It's only full of idiodic crazy lunatic sons of [censored]es. I liked the wording in your poem. It was dead awesome!
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by HurtDeepDown | [ Reply to This ]
      Your frustration and rebellion at feeling helpless in such a structured setting as school really comes across well. Clean up the spelling, punctuation, and grammar and this piece will be great!
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah I noticed the eminem in here to. Im a big fan but I like people to be original. But this is pretty funny. You should slap ms.Leak with an eraser. haha. that would be some funny [censored]. Well I should she is a [censored] to me anyways. Well keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah I noticed the eminem in here to. Im a big fan but I like people to be original. But this is pretty funny. You should slap ms.Leak with an eraser. haha. that would be some funny [censored]. Well I should she is a [censored] to me anyways. Well keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]

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