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    dots Submission Name: today was another daydots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotstoday was another daydots
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    today was another day
    tommorow is not going to be the same
    so don't cave in
    Be brave
    don't be a slave
    stand up and praise
    don't haze
    tiring listen to people saying that inproper
    all it is,is just a phrase.
    Don't be dazed.
    today was another day
    tommorow is not going to be the same.
    don't be tamed
    put some shame on the fame.
    today was another day
    tommorow is not going to be the same.
    today was a tough case
    this person had no taste
    walking around in plad shirt with a butterfly colar.
    today was another day
    tommorow is not going to be the same.




    Submitted on 2004-11-27 20:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the way you used connosonce ( i think that's the right word...) Where you use the same ryhming sound within several lines... anyways, I really liked it. Hope to hear from you!
    ~Amanda
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by AmandaLyn | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm I have no clue what that person was talking about connosonce because I do not know what that is. haha. Well keep writing and I will keep reading I think I only have one more thing of yours to read..
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]


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