hey nice leopard by the way... is it your pet??? and for your piece... it has some potential but the shortness of which lacks the purpose of its meaning... maybe you would like to elaborate or add more fillers... but the essence is damn good... i guess! kudos... STPN
hmmm, thought-provoking. I wouldn't add more cause then you would give your readers a meaing and they won't think about it anymore. I like the way it is and that it asks me to think and make my own interpretation. the second line is great. well done.
You've written a conundrum here, and I think I'll come back and look for several days, just to see how many slides I can view. Right now, I'm thinking of soul escaping a reality that's been uglied up for no reason. That taking a little soar into the atomosphere, as long as one has both flying and landing lessons, never hurts, because the balance comes back as we take time to remember who we are. Beautiful mind, lady. Hugs, nan
Amy, This one is fairly good but leave the reader to wonder if the earth will roll off and crush the soul or whether is a boon of good luck. I hope it was the latter of the two. I always find it wonderful that you leave so many little blanks for the reader to ponder and fill for himself. I think it's why your writes are so popular (although I'm sure the length doesnt hurt either ..lol). Actually I think it's quite hard to pack more into something so short. Well done despite your doubts. jan
I like it, except the last line seems to be a bit off in relation to the rest of the poem. You might want to tweak some of the words in that one. Otherwise, I like the vision and emotion behind this. Nice work.