I like your style, how you separated every line like that. I think that people often miss the song that is played out in the sky, whether it be the stars or the birds, because they are too wrapped up in their own lives. Awesome job dude ~Jess
Hey there. I love poetry that in some way relates to the sky and stars and the like. I love the sky. It's probably my favorite topic to write on or include in my work.
This piece is good, the only thing that I would reccommend would be to double check the rhyme scheme. It's a little bit hard to read through, some of it seems a little bit off. But otherwise this poem is great. Much love to ya.
I too think that you have great imagery and for me the first four lines were the best because they had a rhyme scheme I could comprehend. Not that the words were completely understandable, quite the opposite in that field actually, you make your points very clearly, but as the poem goes on, your rhyming seems to get a bit random and the flow suffers as a consequence. Maybe patch that up a bit. Then I will have nothing to complain about. Great write!