Ohh! I love all the poems about love and passion right now. I think its cause Im falling. I can FINALLY RELATE to them! I love this, especially the last stanza hold me longer, my dear. hold me strong, hold me near. donít let me wander; donít let me go. It seems as though you cant live without him. Lovely job. -Andrya
you did a good job writing this, because you were short and to the point, and I stil got the feeling that you were feeling. well done. the second stanza is not as good as the rest of the poem. It's a tad akward. anyhoo, this is a good poem. well done!
Wonderful! A very personal poem, written with someone special in mind. You may not want to change anything about it, but if so inclined, I suggest that "blossoming" be changed to "in blossom", and "my dear" is not needed. A soul opening up like a flower that has been nurtured by someone's love is a terrific idea. I loved it.
Its almost as if you seek love but almost dread time because you know that all love isnt true love. so in away you try to derail the inevitable by saying hold me closer and tighter. Sad and beautiful at the same time I really like this piece alot very hard to forget