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    dots Submission Name: Loritabdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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    she's got loritab in her veins
    she's to hurt to hate
    she pushes pain away
    and fills up on moriphine again

    sadness is too easy
    feeling sympathy is out of date

    her blood is poison
    at least that's what she hears
    she's full of reason
    at least that's what she fears

    sadness is to easy
    feeling scared is confused

    she fills up on pills, pot and beer
    she only likes to taste the weed
    the rest jut drowns shit out
    and she is too sick of speed

    but her happy little pills won't keep her up all night
    she has to come down
    so she pretends she's alright

    with a bag filled with pencils and paper
    moriphine and a guitar
    Marley and Cobain in her Cd player
    its all she needs to fill her heart

    you watch her leave and wave goodbye
    you shake your head in distaste
    you cannot help but wonder why
    this girl has become such a waste

    Submitted on 2004-11-28 17:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Seems like this girl has made a transformation- which is excellent.
    | Posted on 2015-08-27 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      with a bag filled with pencils and paper
    moriphine and a guitar
    Marley and Cobain in her Cd player
    its all she needs to fill her heart

    This is my favorite part of this poem...I think of you, packing your bags in Tennessee, to come spend the night with me or Aunt Deana. I almost miss that summer. I was still all sad, but I had you and Jessie, and at that point, I think in a way, I still had Tony...It makes my stomach feel funny...
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very beautiful m poem / i brings a lot of imagies to my head ( a great poem is good at doing that). i love the whole medical theme to the poem. this is going on my fav list.

    my fav line is: sadness is too easy
    feeling sympathy is out of date

    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      this one almost made me cry for some weird f-u-c-i-n-g reason. goddamn you. what did you put in this? it seems so silly and stupid but then it blows your mind. whatever it was - it was good.
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      whats up girl?...lol...but for real, this is a sad poem...and i am telling you that you have not become a waste at all...i think it is funny that everyone doesn't know what that girl is, but i do..and i still blame myself for hurting you...but yeah the poem was really [censored]in awesome...i liked it...well talk to ya l8r i guess..by jazz..
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      pain is easy to give into I don't know I grieve a little each day when it will be my mother inlaws
    last day she is very ill I can empathize
    but I loved your poem keep up the good work and keep writing
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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