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    dots Submission Name: #1dots
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    Author: max
    ASL Info:    27 m tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 152/191/55
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1189
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 556



    Description:
       wrote this on April Fools Day this year.


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    dots#1dots
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    A morning of shine that shone through all the
    waving branches of trees of green leaves,
    you know, the day is not as long as it seems.
    The days are not as long as they seem.
    It's just that the sun never seems to go down,
    it seems like it will stay for 100 hours.
    The hours are long it seems, 'cause it seems that
    the sun tries to stay in the same spot.
    'Cause the sun it seems tries to remain
    for 100 hours, which is impossible.
    April Fools Day only comes once a year.




    Submitted on 2004-11-28 19:33:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what the [censored] are you talking about?
    d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d
    I wasn't trying to be funny numbnuts.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      its almost like your saying that april fools day (like the actual day itself) fools us too... not just the ppl who try to fool us or become fools...
    the day is not as long as it seems but the hours seem to last forever... its so condtradictory but it so isnt... you know...?
    damn i love the way you think... some ppl are just to closed minded to have any idea what you are on about... ppl on this site dont seem to take the time to read stuff and get under the surface but whatever... i love your groove boy!
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this piece was cool. A little too repetitive perhaps, but I get the meaning perfectly, and I think its a cool idea. Like the former comment stated: you used April Fools Day to make it seem like the actual Day fools you, not just the people that named it that day or inspired the creation of the idea of April Fools. I thought this was very cute. Again, I'd revise it and take out some of the repetition, but overall, this idea is very ingenius. Good job, Max!
    | Posted on 2004-12-03 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]


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