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    dots Submission Name: miss youdots

    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 990
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       rusty... i really dislike this piece... i havent written poetry in awhile though... be nice...

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    dotsmiss youdots

    Maybe there’s beauty even when it’s dark,
    I’ve been told it takes courage to survive the heat,
    Maybe there’s love even in the depths of Hell,
    Somehow this feeling feels a bit incomplete,
    There’s something profound in the silence tonight,
    I miss the warmth your voice used to possess,
    Take off your halo and join me on earth,
    And maybe we can both lay our fears to rest,
    Your name is still carved within me,
    We haven’t spoken in quite some time,
    You know I adore you even when you‘re sad,
    But I can’t help loving you when you smile,
    Your darker days come with a stubborn light,
    That follows you wherever you go,
    You balance your pain with your stoic tears,
    You are stronger than you could ever know,
    It’ll be a long December without you here,
    I’m ready to drown in the mistakes I’ve made,
    Please, won‘t you come home for just one night?
    I swear, there’s a beauty in your fallen grace,
    Tell me lies that you know I need,
    My faith is restored whenever you‘re around,
    And tonight your voice echoes in the wind,
    But I’m falling in deeper, you were my solid ground,
    I miss you like a child misses their parent,
    And I think I might depend on you even more,
    Because a child’s innocence is something I lack,
    I am shattered, and broken, and rusted, and worn,
    Ice cold fire erupts from this wreckage,
    And only your love can heal these wounds,
    I’d kill to see you for one last time,
    And so if you’re listening… come home soon…

    Submitted on 2004-11-28 20:43:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that is so sad... i feel like crying. God knows how many times ive felt that way. You say your rusty? id like to see your prime! Keep on keeping on. One thing, tho.

    Please, won‘t you come home for just one night?
    I swear, there’s a beauty in your fallen grace,
    Tell me lies that you know I need,
    My faith is restored whenever you‘re around,

    it sounds cliché. i kno you are original, more so than a lot ive seen, but maybe try to use your imagination more.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by thesacredone | [ Reply to This ]
      tuckerbutter that is quite possibly the best and most helpful comment i have recived thusfar. i appreciate it immensely and will take into consideration all that you've said.

    thesacredone and fallen_angel, thanks guys, i aprpeciate it.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]

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