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    dots Submission Name: Notches in the Boatdots
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    Author: littleshuford
    ASL Info:    19/M/nc
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 140/176/52
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsNotches in the Boatdots
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    Dolphins ripping through the surface
    Spraying blood all around them.
    The firey tree drops another crimson cherry behind them,
    Only to fall into the wake of those fish of death.
    The beauty of eternity is reflected in the neverending flow
    From the unhinging of my skin.
    Frolicking past the boat,
    The dolphins put another notch,
    And say to each other,
    "Another one bites the dust."




    Submitted on 2004-11-28 21:04:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well this is certainly an interesting little piece. it was relatively short, but the content definitely made up for it. the images were really well conveyed. i really like this piece for some reason.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      yes it was sort but that's not a bad thing. Interesting story and graphic in a good way.
    EVIL dolphins EVIL! Good Job. Im looking forward to more.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey my baby doll. Ha. This is good. As always. I love it how you just randomly write things out of nowhere...unlike little 'ol me, who has to search for inspiration. :-)

    Oh babe...I believe you misspelled "firey"...I think it's "fiery"...anyhoo...

    I love you my Turtle. Another great piece. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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