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    dots Submission Name: The silence of Stonedots
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    Author: Tarek Refaat
    ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 370/508/212
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe silence of Stonedots
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    The statue stood there for thousands of years..
    witnessing alot from fears to tears...
    seeing the glory and seeing the defeat...
    of many people who've came down to their feet..
    it witnessed the rise and the fall... of many..
    and compared to numbers they are not too many..

    The statue was there to see it all
    the statue was there see them crumble and fall..
    each shock the statue would witness..
    would cause a crack...inside its core..

    no one really bothered the statue..
    its just made of stone.. just thought all..

    as time passed by the cracks grew more..
    they'd play and make love around the statue..
    they'd hide behind it in times of fear..
    they'd take it a shelter at times of war..

    one day..at the dawn of a new day..
    a tear shed in the eyes of the statue..
    as the cracks began to grow showing on all its body..
    making sounds like the breaking of bones..
    a sound of a crumble sounded in each way..
    everyone witnessed the statue's fall..
    it was its time to crumble down..
    it had its time of rise..
    and now its the time for its fall..
    shattered to so many pieces
    no one believed it would crumble and fall..
    after all it was made of stone.. all still thought..

    and this was it..
    that was the statue..
    that was the stone..
    and this is the end of the silence of stone...





    Submitted on 2004-11-28 21:25:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is freaking cool I love stuff like this. Do you write like this all the time? The ending isn't what I thought it would be but the ending you had was good.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]


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