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    dots Submission Name: He's Cryingdots
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    Author: brain
    ASL Info:    28/m/Miami FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 27/37/12
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHe's Cryingdots
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    Sitting in front of the television--
    images and sounds, square box--
    the remote is in his hand,
    He's crying.

    When he speaks about his mother
    he's talking deep, deep down--
    Her things abide in the bottom of him.

    Has he now gone wrong? He wonders.
    As the tears cleanse his morality,
    he asks himself, "Am I a loser?"

    This man is the king of the world.





    Submitted on 2004-11-28 21:26:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this write, I liked its simplicity and meaning it supports. I thought you did a great job with the imagery of the subject, letting me as a reader feel more attached to the story. I liked it very much, and I thank you for sharing here for us. I look foward to readin gmore of your write in the future and hope you check out some of my work too, have a great night
    Matt
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by matt73 | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of a song by better than ezra called the king of new orleans. whether the bottom is the top or the top is the bottom that last line really scored this on my favorites list. plus i've got mom issues and i love tv, so cheers, this ones a winner. and as for stupid down there who didn't get the meaning of this, well lucidity is wasted on them dont worry about it.
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by ariadne | [ Reply to This ]


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