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free the sore in my soul


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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free the sore in my soul



Thoughts left unspoken
Fester, like a sore infection in my soul.
For so long, I’ve controlled, contained, refrained from
Unleashing the demons of my anger.
I cannot give voice to the omni present whispers.
If I do, when I do, I shall…
Touch me slow,
Then let me go,
Blink when you look into my eyes.
Talk to me. Tell me. Show me.
Hold me, Mold me. If you need to Fuck me.
FREE ME and the voices.
Let me soar as I release the
Infectious sore in my soul.






Submitted on 2004-11-29 00:49:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I feel so mixed about this one. I feel like I should like it, but don't one minute... then I feel like I shouldn't but do. The wording is so powerfully WRONG for the subject matter, but it feels like that was the point... sores and infections and boils just aren't often associated with love or lust emotions... and their presence in this write makes it SO powerful... but it feels odd.

Perhaps that was the point :) At any rate, regardless as to whether I decide that I should but don't, or shouldn't but do... this is a great piece of thought provoking, emotion invoking art.
| Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]
  
i can relate to this because i happen to be feeling this way right now. it's angry pain right?
it's feeling dirty about how you feel. don't change anything here. it's vulnerable yet insane. it's good
| Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by pioneerheart | [ Reply to This ]
  interestingly i was told this very thing tonight after dropping someone off, talk to me..tell me..show me..after I had ran away from her a couple of times afraid of what could develope between us. This is a nice write, good wording and thought.
Thanks for sharing,
Alan
| Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]


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