We change lanes day in day out throughout our lives. Sometimes though, we choose a path which will never meet or join up with certain roads ever again. Would be nice if we had known that beforehand, but such is life.
I really liked this one This write makes one look at the choices they made in Life Alot of the choices we make we can go back and correct them But the ones we cant correct are the ones we really have to think long and hard on Thank You for sharing this God Bless Your Friend Ron
And Thank You once again for your recent comments I really do appreciate the fact you take time out to comment on so many of my writes Thank You Your Friend Ron
hey for the second time your poem gives me the chill... the line:
Once I chose a lane And it changed my life
its too powerfull, and never gives another reason for you to not read the succedding parts... do you have short stories? well if you do good for you... because i think you can write a very good page turner... its very nice!
hey or the second time your poem gives me the chill... the line:
Once I chose a lane And it changed my life
its too powerfull, and never gives another reason for you to not read the succedding parts... do you have short stories? well if you do good for you... because i think you can write a very good page turner... its very nice!
Great poem, the message behind this was pretty clear. CLear in a way that we understood this was about the chopice you make, but vague because you didnt state what the effect of your choice was. But hey, I liked the mystery to it, so I have no complaints.
Poem format wise I like this two lines per description, but to be honest I didnt know they were even supposed to be rhyminf lines until I got into the 5th stanza. I know you have a rhyme scheme going on here, but its so small I really think your poem would hold the same meaning without it. Instead of the rhyme just add more imagery. But thats just my opinion.
Great writing! Yes, sometimes the life gets complicated, and we have to choose the right path to go further, to reach the goals...something it's hard to make the right decission, but we just need to listen to out heart to get to know...what we really want and need in this life...Very colorful, bright and interesting poem, full of great imagery. Well done!
Submission Name: The lane
